for Why He Hates It10/8/2015 c1 
6Kinsutenekochan
I know some parts of it are a little odd, but I thought this was an awesome fic! I liked the descriptions and the emotion. And I honestly didnt think mustang was too oc, so great job, keep it up and thank you!
6KinsutenekochanI know some parts of it are a little odd, but I thought this was an awesome fic! I liked the descriptions and the emotion. And I honestly didnt think mustang was too oc, so great job, keep it up and thank you!
8/10/2015 c1 ME
KAWAII-DESU!
Roy and Ed are cute in every way, parental or slash! I wanna know what happens with those photos...that would be a great sequel, ne?
Nice story, good mixture of emotional, humour and just...other...yeah. Well done!
KawaiiKitsuneGirl
KAWAII-DESU!
Roy and Ed are cute in every way, parental or slash! I wanna know what happens with those photos...that would be a great sequel, ne?
Nice story, good mixture of emotional, humour and just...other...yeah. Well done!
KawaiiKitsuneGirl
7/21/2015 c1 Guest
Aww! Don't be so hard on yourself! This was adorable and I kept saying "aww!" throughout the entire thing! I loved it! And Hughes, you sly dog! XD
Aww! Don't be so hard on yourself! This was adorable and I kept saying "aww!" throughout the entire thing! I loved it! And Hughes, you sly dog! XD
6/30/2015 c1 Guest
oh
my
GOD
SO CUTE I JUST CANNOT HANDLE IT
I mean hella OC but who gives a damn it brought me close to tears!
oh
my
GOD
SO CUTE I JUST CANNOT HANDLE IT
I mean hella OC but who gives a damn it brought me close to tears!
1/15/2014 c1 8BlueIsTheColourOfOurPlanet
I love the "I was bleeding not knocking on death' door." "Suuuure you weren't" part, I can just imagine their faces :D Good one :)
8BlueIsTheColourOfOurPlanetI love the "I was bleeding not knocking on death' door." "Suuuure you weren't" part, I can just imagine their faces :D Good one :)
1/6/2014 c1 9CJbean
Aw I like it! The dialogue flowed easily and sounded realistic, and the overall idea was just so cute!
One piece of advice: try not to be redundant with your writing. There were some sentences in which you used the same word multiple times. It will sound better if you switch up the vocabulary a little.
Other than that, I have no problems. This was really good for your first fanfiction!
9CJbeanAw I like it! The dialogue flowed easily and sounded realistic, and the overall idea was just so cute!
One piece of advice: try not to be redundant with your writing. There were some sentences in which you used the same word multiple times. It will sound better if you switch up the vocabulary a little.
Other than that, I have no problems. This was really good for your first fanfiction!
1/1/2014 c1 12SheepyBeep
Ow that fanfiction murdered my feels
but it was beautiful.
Parental RoyEd is always my favorite type of fanfic.
Always.
Please try writing more parental k.
12SheepyBeepOw that fanfiction murdered my feels
but it was beautiful.
Parental RoyEd is always my favorite type of fanfic.
Always.
Please try writing more parental k.
11/21/2013 c1 8MercedesAsheSorrel
Very good story! I loved it! And I can only imagine the look on Roy's face when Hughes starts flashing those photos! Just thinking about it is making me laugh hysterically! Great job!
8MercedesAsheSorrelVery good story! I loved it! And I can only imagine the look on Roy's face when Hughes starts flashing those photos! Just thinking about it is making me laugh hysterically! Great job!
10/30/2013 c1 9ZakuroU
AAH! I DON'T KNOW WHETHER TO LAUGH OR CRY OR SCREAM OR DIE OR THROW MYSELF OFF A BUILDING LIKE SHERLOCK! (Haha, poem.)
THAT WAS SO AWESOME!
For a first fic, nice one. I was excited the whole time and I read it soooo fast.
(Ah, Hughes I love you.)
I figured it was a gun... Yay. I'm not as stupid as I originally thought!
That was so great. My legs feel weird. KEEP IT UP!
(P. S., The random chair gave me an idea... )
9ZakuroUAAH! I DON'T KNOW WHETHER TO LAUGH OR CRY OR SCREAM OR DIE OR THROW MYSELF OFF A BUILDING LIKE SHERLOCK! (Haha, poem.)
THAT WAS SO AWESOME!
For a first fic, nice one. I was excited the whole time and I read it soooo fast.
(Ah, Hughes I love you.)
I figured it was a gun... Yay. I'm not as stupid as I originally thought!
That was so great. My legs feel weird. KEEP IT UP!
(P. S., The random chair gave me an idea... )
10/5/2013 c1 13ToscaThorCat
A good description for a Smith & Wesson is that it is an old school police gun. (just being helpful :D )
13ToscaThorCatA good description for a Smith & Wesson is that it is an old school police gun. (just being helpful :D )
9/9/2013 c1 10Sokkasm
Yeah, painkillers are one hell of a drug...
I am a big sucker for little moments like these between Ed and Roy. I really liked it.
10SokkasmYeah, painkillers are one hell of a drug...
I am a big sucker for little moments like these between Ed and Roy. I really liked it.
9/9/2013 c1 ember36
that was really good but i think you may have broke me with that comment at the end about al i am still laughing and i don't think i am going to stop :D
that was really good but i think you may have broke me with that comment at the end about al i am still laughing and i don't think i am going to stop :D
9/7/2013 c1 Guest
Yes, a Smith and Weston is (if I recall correctly) an American gun company. Though SIG Saeurs are more common among law enforcement personnel.
Yes, a Smith and Weston is (if I recall correctly) an American gun company. Though SIG Saeurs are more common among law enforcement personnel.
9/6/2013 c1 28Firefly264
This is great for someone new to fanfic! The writing is great; the descriptions and emotions were all well done and nicely portrayed. I really enjoyed this!
28Firefly264This is great for someone new to fanfic! The writing is great; the descriptions and emotions were all well done and nicely portrayed. I really enjoyed this!