for War and Tragedy1/6/2014 c3 
9CJbean
I think you should post the rest of part 3 as another chapter because I really liked the last sentence and think it makes a good ending.
This seems like a cool story. I personally was disapointed with The Conquer of Shamballa, so I am interested to see how you continue ed and als story.
One piece of advice: the dialogue was not very realistic in some parts. When Ed was telling his story and Roy was explaining the changes that had occurred, it sounded like they were reading from a textbook or something. You got the information across well, but try to tweak your writing a little to make it sound more authentic.
Other than that great job with this! Keep up the good work.
9CJbeanI think you should post the rest of part 3 as another chapter because I really liked the last sentence and think it makes a good ending.
This seems like a cool story. I personally was disapointed with The Conquer of Shamballa, so I am interested to see how you continue ed and als story.
One piece of advice: the dialogue was not very realistic in some parts. When Ed was telling his story and Roy was explaining the changes that had occurred, it sounded like they were reading from a textbook or something. You got the information across well, but try to tweak your writing a little to make it sound more authentic.
Other than that great job with this! Keep up the good work.
11/12/2013 c3 Guest
luv this story! plz update soon!
luv this story! plz update soon!
10/31/2013 c3 ms. cheerful
awesome! great job protraying their personalities and stuff! its fun!
awesome! great job protraying their personalities and stuff! its fun!
10/30/2013 c3 10Sokkasm
Reading this reminds me of how much more I love Brotherhood compared to the 2003 series. (Because they don't get a reunion like this.)
Hmm...I'd go with another part of the prologue.
10SokkasmReading this reminds me of how much more I love Brotherhood compared to the 2003 series. (Because they don't get a reunion like this.)
Hmm...I'd go with another part of the prologue.
9/23/2013 c2 theyusedtobecalledlemons
Another fantastic chapter! can't wait until everybody sees how much Ed's grown... ehehe! ;3
Another fantastic chapter! can't wait until everybody sees how much Ed's grown... ehehe! ;3
9/23/2013 c2 4inthehood
Well I am indeed pleased. Nicely written an quiet authentic, finally Al is not the nice boy fresh out of kindergarten. I am interested where thes fanfic goes, especially because I myself was very unhappy with the end of the series. I am really looking forwart to further chapters
4inthehoodWell I am indeed pleased. Nicely written an quiet authentic, finally Al is not the nice boy fresh out of kindergarten. I am interested where thes fanfic goes, especially because I myself was very unhappy with the end of the series. I am really looking forwart to further chapters
9/22/2013 c2 10Sokkasm
I think you portrayed the brothers quite nicely. May writer's block avoid your system.
10SokkasmI think you portrayed the brothers quite nicely. May writer's block avoid your system.
9/21/2013 c2 28Firefly264
*standing obation* Ed grew! Finally! Though I guess now he won't really be the pipsqueak of the gang now... Any chance we'll be hearing from Mustang anytime soon? I bet Ed can't WAIT for that conversation. Interesting start to what looks like a neat story; I look forward to seeing just what comes next!
28Firefly264*standing obation* Ed grew! Finally! Though I guess now he won't really be the pipsqueak of the gang now... Any chance we'll be hearing from Mustang anytime soon? I bet Ed can't WAIT for that conversation. Interesting start to what looks like a neat story; I look forward to seeing just what comes next!
9/10/2013 c1 theyusedtobecalledlemons
MUST. HAVE. MORE. AWESOOOOOME! I will NEVER be satisfied with how the series ended! all the other alternate endings ive found SUCK. 8D
MUST. HAVE. MORE. AWESOOOOOME! I will NEVER be satisfied with how the series ended! all the other alternate endings ive found SUCK. 8D