for Becoming the Enemy8/28/2021 c9 Iduhf
How the heck are you so good at plot in only 9 chapters?!
How the heck are you so good at plot in only 9 chapters?!
1/14/2020 c15 JackKirk11a2bb30
Can you make a AU in witch hiccup said yes to the king and joins the dragons.
Can you make a AU in witch hiccup said yes to the king and joins the dragons.
12/29/2019 c19 JackKirk11a2bb3
Make that AT of hiccup and toothless growing up together include astrid growing up with them together as night furies, yes all 3 of them as the same species in the kings next with valca. Maybe half a desided to take hiccup with her and astrid was gain on board the ship to look for that treasure as well and when they found the sword all valca, baby hiccup and astrid got all turned into night furys.
Make that AT of hiccup and toothless growing up together include astrid growing up with them together as night furies, yes all 3 of them as the same species in the kings next with valca. Maybe half a desided to take hiccup with her and astrid was gain on board the ship to look for that treasure as well and when they found the sword all valca, baby hiccup and astrid got all turned into night furys.
4/28/2019 c2 Name redacted
Great chapter, although I was lowkey expecting Astrid to pull a Heather.
Great chapter, although I was lowkey expecting Astrid to pull a Heather.
12/3/2018 c25 A Reader
Wow! I really enjoyed your story, especially your take on the red death. There aren't many fanfictions that use the character as anything more than a 2D villain. I look forward to reading the sequel and seeing were your plot ends up. Great work ;)
Wow! I really enjoyed your story, especially your take on the red death. There aren't many fanfictions that use the character as anything more than a 2D villain. I look forward to reading the sequel and seeing were your plot ends up. Great work ;)
6/10/2018 c1 Zakkon
You know... the beginning is kinda bland, add some spice so readers can actually get hooked in
You know... the beginning is kinda bland, add some spice so readers can actually get hooked in
6/10/2018 c25 Zakkon
Ok! I have to say I wasn’t expecting this. It was amazing and such a creative plot that you came up with! Though it would’ve been nice if you got more likes, I don’t understand, your writing applies great rhetorical devices that draw readers in.
However, I really want to see the success of this story, so I have some criticisms to give you:
Pls, work on yo grammar and speeling
I suggest you spend more time reinforcing personalities of the characters as well as take a closer look at psychological effects of the things that the character’s experience.
That is all! I know I was (super) late because it took me years to find this story hiding in a corner. As a result, I couldn’t give much feedback, but I still want you to know I completely enjoyed the story.
Ok! I have to say I wasn’t expecting this. It was amazing and such a creative plot that you came up with! Though it would’ve been nice if you got more likes, I don’t understand, your writing applies great rhetorical devices that draw readers in.
However, I really want to see the success of this story, so I have some criticisms to give you:
Pls, work on yo grammar and speeling
I suggest you spend more time reinforcing personalities of the characters as well as take a closer look at psychological effects of the things that the character’s experience.
That is all! I know I was (super) late because it took me years to find this story hiding in a corner. As a result, I couldn’t give much feedback, but I still want you to know I completely enjoyed the story.
1/3/2018 c1 
26Insanity Studios Ink
Ooh, good, my skills are finally useful. 'Burgal' is actually not a word, but a similar word, 'burgle,' is. You're welcome.
26Insanity Studios InkOoh, good, my skills are finally useful. 'Burgal' is actually not a word, but a similar word, 'burgle,' is. You're welcome.
11/22/2016 c15 Guest
I really hope that the "Awaken, child and embrace the glory that is your birthright." Part was a reference to Starcraft. If you want to know what I am talking about, search "Starcraft 1 Zerg mission 1" on YouTube.
I really hope that the "Awaken, child and embrace the glory that is your birthright." Part was a reference to Starcraft. If you want to know what I am talking about, search "Starcraft 1 Zerg mission 1" on YouTube.
8/3/2016 c25 6Cara normal
At bonus chapter Hiccup's mother says she want come back, but betrayed berk. This is confuse and sad. I think i will read the sequel tomorrow.
And before i forget, this was great fic.
6Cara normalAt bonus chapter Hiccup's mother says she want come back, but betrayed berk. This is confuse and sad. I think i will read the sequel tomorrow.
And before i forget, this was great fic.
6/25/2016 c1 99thProblem
I think once you finish the sequel, I'll reread this story and the second one!It's my favourite fanfic.
I think once you finish the sequel, I'll reread this story and the second one!It's my favourite fanfic.