for Naruto Rise of a guardian12/30/2013 c1 Chris Durham
for team I think like Naruto hinata saske or kiba could be interesting or the original but with the changes you already have made would be interesting.
for team I think like Naruto hinata saske or kiba could be interesting or the original but with the changes you already have made would be interesting.
11/4/2013 c2 Guest
I like the story so far but could use some spell check :)
I like the story so far but could use some spell check :)
10/11/2013 c2 paladin3030
You do know you missspelled a couple of names: Minto & jiriya, don't you mean Minato & Jiraiya.
Make sure you read thorugh the chapter's before you post.
It will help you catch your mistakes.
You do know you missspelled a couple of names: Minto & jiriya, don't you mean Minato & Jiraiya.
Make sure you read thorugh the chapter's before you post.
It will help you catch your mistakes.
10/4/2013 c1 fantasymaniac
This looks like it could be really good! It's a very good start and I look forward to seeing how you continue it! Thank you and I hope you keep going with this!
This looks like it could be really good! It's a very good start and I look forward to seeing how you continue it! Thank you and I hope you keep going with this!
10/4/2013 c1 Guest
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10/3/2013 c1 CW
The quality of writing in the last 1/3 of the chapter doesn't match up to the first 2/3. The beginning was pretty good with only a few misspelled words, then you regress into a choppy style and throw in the word sex/dick for no apparent reason. Maybe just because you're young and just like to say sex/dick? Did 2 different people write this? I prefer the author of the starting portion (even with the spelling errors) to the finishing scene's randomness.
The quality of writing in the last 1/3 of the chapter doesn't match up to the first 2/3. The beginning was pretty good with only a few misspelled words, then you regress into a choppy style and throw in the word sex/dick for no apparent reason. Maybe just because you're young and just like to say sex/dick? Did 2 different people write this? I prefer the author of the starting portion (even with the spelling errors) to the finishing scene's randomness.
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