for Susan Embarks8/26/2019 c1 
52Temple Cloud
Wow, travelling through L-space! I haven't played Legend of Zelda, but I'm pretty sure Susan hasn't either, so I'll probably be able to make as much sense of what's going on as she does. Are you going to write successive chapters as part of this document (which will make it easier for me to follow) or separate stories? I'll look forward to seeing where this is going - but I'm sure Aslan hasn't given up on Susan.
I like the idea of Susan telling the story of her and her family's adventures to her friend Jack - who would be completely unfazed by this, given that he has already had to write down the memoirs of another friend who has travelled to alien planets, and in one case managed to avert another planetary Fall from Grace (and who grumbles about Jack leaving out most of the explanatory detail in the interests of brevity). Wonder whether he's introduced Susan Pevensie and Elwyn Ransom to each other? Or had Ransom already left Earth for good, before this?
52Temple CloudWow, travelling through L-space! I haven't played Legend of Zelda, but I'm pretty sure Susan hasn't either, so I'll probably be able to make as much sense of what's going on as she does. Are you going to write successive chapters as part of this document (which will make it easier for me to follow) or separate stories? I'll look forward to seeing where this is going - but I'm sure Aslan hasn't given up on Susan.
I like the idea of Susan telling the story of her and her family's adventures to her friend Jack - who would be completely unfazed by this, given that he has already had to write down the memoirs of another friend who has travelled to alien planets, and in one case managed to avert another planetary Fall from Grace (and who grumbles about Jack leaving out most of the explanatory detail in the interests of brevity). Wonder whether he's introduced Susan Pevensie and Elwyn Ransom to each other? Or had Ransom already left Earth for good, before this?
10/5/2013 c1 2MCH
Interesting I always prefer story about Susan in which she finds her way back to Aslan her family and Narnia. A good start to Susan journey.
2MCHInteresting I always prefer story about Susan in which she finds her way back to Aslan her family and Narnia. A good start to Susan journey.
10/4/2013 c1 Angel Adept
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This looks like a good beginning. As always, I really like the way you write Susan. My only complaint about this chapter is that it's rather short. ;) Just kidding - I know that you're good at keeping your writing concise and well-organized. Anyway, I'm eager to see where this goes. :)
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This looks like a good beginning. As always, I really like the way you write Susan. My only complaint about this chapter is that it's rather short. ;) Just kidding - I know that you're good at keeping your writing concise and well-organized. Anyway, I'm eager to see where this goes. :)