
3/29/2014 c1
15She Who Loves Pineapples
Awwwe this is cute. ...to be honest I can't really see Beat noticing that Neku and Shiki have something going on unless one of them told him, or if Rhyme said something about it... But the way he played matchmaker (trying and failing to be subtle) seemed really IC... Joshua was also really funny in the way he noticed Neku's crush and was playing matchmaker to embarrass him...
As far as grammar goes, I noticed a few minor things, like missing commas to divide commas, as well as a few missing words that would probably be spotted in a second proof-read.
Overall this was a cute and enjoyable fic.

Awwwe this is cute. ...to be honest I can't really see Beat noticing that Neku and Shiki have something going on unless one of them told him, or if Rhyme said something about it... But the way he played matchmaker (trying and failing to be subtle) seemed really IC... Joshua was also really funny in the way he noticed Neku's crush and was playing matchmaker to embarrass him...
As far as grammar goes, I noticed a few minor things, like missing commas to divide commas, as well as a few missing words that would probably be spotted in a second proof-read.
Overall this was a cute and enjoyable fic.
10/8/2013 c1
57Amulet Misty
I'll say it again - but I'm so proud of youuuu. I think the best part of this were the Joshua lines. You know exactly what I mean xD Hehe, it's he best combination of humour and Neshiki. Which makes me happy -fan girls-.
:D

I'll say it again - but I'm so proud of youuuu. I think the best part of this were the Joshua lines. You know exactly what I mean xD Hehe, it's he best combination of humour and Neshiki. Which makes me happy -fan girls-.
:D