for Dream Jump10/26/2014 c1 
5The Patchwork Rabbit
Interesting. Maybe it should be sadder? Oh well, It's fine as is!
5The Patchwork RabbitInteresting. Maybe it should be sadder? Oh well, It's fine as is!
11/21/2013 c2 6regulusgal
It's a really good idea to have Kyoko's life not revolving only around acting. You manage to show that she's also an ordinary girl.
A bit surprised to see that the setting is in LA, but never mind.
Some grammars need to be fixed here and there. Otherthan that, you've done a good job so far.
6regulusgalIt's a really good idea to have Kyoko's life not revolving only around acting. You manage to show that she's also an ordinary girl.
A bit surprised to see that the setting is in LA, but never mind.
Some grammars need to be fixed here and there. Otherthan that, you've done a good job so far.
11/3/2013 c2 muchachomomo
This is really good. And DAMN KYOKO CAN DUNK?! Hella perfect, I swear.
This is really good. And DAMN KYOKO CAN DUNK?! Hella perfect, I swear.
11/1/2013 c2 3Yuki Urahimi
Good morning or evening. One thing i must say. WHY DO YOU LEAVE IT AT THAT POINT. WAAAAAAAAAAA, EVIL EVIL EVIL! me liked the chapter and story o far writ more. adne more and more. k that it for now.
3Yuki UrahimiGood morning or evening. One thing i must say. WHY DO YOU LEAVE IT AT THAT POINT. WAAAAAAAAAAA, EVIL EVIL EVIL! me liked the chapter and story o far writ more. adne more and more. k that it for now.
10/31/2013 c2 Guest
can't wait for the next
can't wait for the next
10/19/2013 c1 Guest
Good job
Good job
10/18/2013 c1 misao97
Hmmmm i really like it so far! Very nice idea! And it's also nice to see kyoko not obsessed with job! I can't wait to read more! Gambatte
Hmmmm i really like it so far! Very nice idea! And it's also nice to see kyoko not obsessed with job! I can't wait to read more! Gambatte
10/17/2013 c1 3CabaretHotSauce
That was beautifull and i loved the story and how u added a few things. I can't wait to see the way you will introduce ren/kuon.
Criticism wise, hmmm... I would say putting in a few descriptive things would be nice like going into a little bit more detail on her emotions and not skimming over them.
Though I've got to say PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE update SOON for example once u read this haha
3CabaretHotSauceThat was beautifull and i loved the story and how u added a few things. I can't wait to see the way you will introduce ren/kuon.
Criticism wise, hmmm... I would say putting in a few descriptive things would be nice like going into a little bit more detail on her emotions and not skimming over them.
Though I've got to say PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE update SOON for example once u read this haha