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1/10/2014 c1 3Chocoholic Princess
Hey there! A mutual friend recommended this story to me, so I figured I'd check it out.

To say I'm not a huge fan of the Mario series (with the exception of MarioKart...love it!), this was really kinda hot XD haha!

Anyway, I noticed quite a few grammar mistakes, but it's nothing that can't be easily fixed :) The fic needs a little beta-ing, but it's definitely not the worst I've read.

I liked the storyline, and the title is pretty fitting too. I was impressed by the one-liner you wrote at the end, I think the way it's worded will totally play on the readers' mind, though might I suggest maybe turning it into a simile, just to add that extra sparkle, y'know?

You did well with writing this, great job!

And also, Lord Shadus sends his regards...I can only assume you know what that means XD lol

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