for Rotted Rowan11/13 c46 silverfishes
Thanks for sharing Darkpetal and thanks Darkpetal's beta
Favorite character: Kisame. Naasica is feeling everything all of the time, and he's very chill in comparison. Very fun.
Favorite scene: Team Kisame reacting to the Hell Forest (or whatever it was called, the fiery face trees). Love the whole concept of it (gore and nature... manmade horrors in manmade woods... the contrast of resting peacefully under a tree and resting I imagine rather restlessly inside one) and the sprinkling of dramatic irony in that scene specifically is delicious.
If I could know anything: Owari is a whole nother person/personality, right? What's his happy ending look like? Or have he and Naasica merged?
Something that appealed to me personally: I love rabid dedication to another person. I love how Naasica manipulated others into that mindset.
Have a good one
Thanks for sharing Darkpetal and thanks Darkpetal's beta
Favorite character: Kisame. Naasica is feeling everything all of the time, and he's very chill in comparison. Very fun.
Favorite scene: Team Kisame reacting to the Hell Forest (or whatever it was called, the fiery face trees). Love the whole concept of it (gore and nature... manmade horrors in manmade woods... the contrast of resting peacefully under a tree and resting I imagine rather restlessly inside one) and the sprinkling of dramatic irony in that scene specifically is delicious.
If I could know anything: Owari is a whole nother person/personality, right? What's his happy ending look like? Or have he and Naasica merged?
Something that appealed to me personally: I love rabid dedication to another person. I love how Naasica manipulated others into that mindset.
Have a good one
11/13 c46 fajaradhi159
Beuuh, why did madara betray the protagonist and went with his original plan? Isn't the plan to install the no fighting compulsion more permanent than the matrix one?
Beuuh, why did madara betray the protagonist and went with his original plan? Isn't the plan to install the no fighting compulsion more permanent than the matrix one?
10/28 c1 Binge Reader
Damn. Didn't know being a female instantly made you disabled.
Damn. Didn't know being a female instantly made you disabled.
10/12 c2 
1Wonderful Imagination
Beautiful. Your post chapter comments explain a lot. The whole "Madara Sama" seems a bit out of place and rushed but I am interested in how this goes. Your writing quality is top notch as I'm sure others have told you :)
1Wonderful ImaginationBeautiful. Your post chapter comments explain a lot. The whole "Madara Sama" seems a bit out of place and rushed but I am interested in how this goes. Your writing quality is top notch as I'm sure others have told you :)
10/12 c1 Wonderful Imagination
Good story so far but something does not make sense. Your MC is extremely paranoid. To the point of having a panic attack at the discovery of having Mokuton. She is so paranoid of everyone that she does not dare tell her own grandmother who is nearly dying and ensures no living soul knows. She sees danger in the most comforting and safe of places, and yet the first time she comes across a known enemy and a dangerous one at that (Madara) she spills her guts?
Extremely out of character. You built an MC who keeps secrets to the extreme and then suddenly had her spill everything to the one person guaranteed to do something about it?
Good story so far but something does not make sense. Your MC is extremely paranoid. To the point of having a panic attack at the discovery of having Mokuton. She is so paranoid of everyone that she does not dare tell her own grandmother who is nearly dying and ensures no living soul knows. She sees danger in the most comforting and safe of places, and yet the first time she comes across a known enemy and a dangerous one at that (Madara) she spills her guts?
Extremely out of character. You built an MC who keeps secrets to the extreme and then suddenly had her spill everything to the one person guaranteed to do something about it?
9/23 c46 CompuBob
This story is pretty good in terms of character development and manipulation. The latter half seems a bit rushed as Naacisa turns into Owari more and more, which I guess is part of it. I feel like it got the point across. Honestly thought that the MC would die though lol.
Also, to answer the final question, I feel like both are fine. I'm the type of person who likes stability, whether it's misfortune (imperfect) or perfection.
This story is pretty good in terms of character development and manipulation. The latter half seems a bit rushed as Naacisa turns into Owari more and more, which I guess is part of it. I feel like it got the point across. Honestly thought that the MC would die though lol.
Also, to answer the final question, I feel like both are fine. I'm the type of person who likes stability, whether it's misfortune (imperfect) or perfection.
9/14 c1 Roransted
This chapter was excellent! The spikes of anxiety I got when Naa found out her chakra nature, the pacing, everything was pretty great. I was not expecting the ending of this chapter at all.
This chapter was excellent! The spikes of anxiety I got when Naa found out her chakra nature, the pacing, everything was pretty great. I was not expecting the ending of this chapter at all.
9/8 c46 Guest
BRO, OF ALL THE FANFICS I'VE READ, YOU ARE THE ONLY ONE THAT MADE ME CARE FOR THE CHARACTERS, I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH. DAMN YOU FOR MAKING ME CRY WHEN KAKASHI DIED
BRO, OF ALL THE FANFICS I'VE READ, YOU ARE THE ONLY ONE THAT MADE ME CARE FOR THE CHARACTERS, I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH. DAMN YOU FOR MAKING ME CRY WHEN KAKASHI DIED
8/13 c46 Guest
Retarded
Retarded
8/4 c46 2AdamKnife
In a story like this, a good ending is hard to write. All along I hoped Naasica would have realised how wrong she was and stopped Madara. And afterwards maybe spend the rest of her life trying create a jutsu to go back in time.
This ending feels bittersweet with extra-bitter.
2AdamKnifeIn a story like this, a good ending is hard to write. All along I hoped Naasica would have realised how wrong she was and stopped Madara. And afterwards maybe spend the rest of her life trying create a jutsu to go back in time.
This ending feels bittersweet with extra-bitter.
7/29 c1 Eterna Ordina
waste of time really . And moreover i don't think you actually know the lore that well. Hagoromo will never allow infinite Tsukuyomi to happen.
Your self insert will be suddenly hugging a timelapsed Sage of six paths naruto with perhaps even a rinnegan. Good luck.
And hey if you do find yourself in the naruto world in the next life don't be so stupid as this version.
waste of time really . And moreover i don't think you actually know the lore that well. Hagoromo will never allow infinite Tsukuyomi to happen.
Your self insert will be suddenly hugging a timelapsed Sage of six paths naruto with perhaps even a rinnegan. Good luck.
And hey if you do find yourself in the naruto world in the next life don't be so stupid as this version.
7/29 c46 Guest
This world of your si will soon be butchered with ease by none other Than Ishiki Otsutsuki. And that's what this retarded self insert of yours deserve to see.
This world of your si will soon be butchered with ease by none other Than Ishiki Otsutsuki. And that's what this retarded self insert of yours deserve to see.