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3/10/2014 c3 Roxygirl
Your welcome! (I still smiling at this chapter. I find it very amusing) Good job
3/7/2014 c2 Roxygirl
Good, good. I can see that he already is falling for her when he hasn't met her. Please do me a favor, wait till before the Battle for Middle-earth before they pelage themselves to each other? Other than that, good job.
3/8/2014 c2 gabriele.aikens
You captured my attention in these first chapters. Good job.
3/7/2014 c2 7Spottedmask12
Cool start!
11/13/2013 c2 Guest
Special Species? Check.
Characteristics Not Typical of Closest-Resembled Species? Check.
Odd Name? Check.
Clearly Mysterious Past? Check.
Bad Guy Desperately Wants Her? Check.
Good Guy Desperately Wants to Save Her? Check.
Multiple Special Powers? Check.
Clearly Needs to be Center of Attention (Probably Due to Author Issues)? Check.
Is Super-Strong but has Super-Weak Moments So Good Guy Will Save Her? Check.
Has a Habit of Being in Pain? Check.
Angsty Self-Narrative Moments? Check.

Definitely a Mary-Sue, but at least this was an entertaining read and you avoided all the other more annoying Mary-Sue tendencies. Kudos on the grammar and spelling.
11/7/2013 c1 biddle c
Shows promise
11/3/2013 c1 Guest
I like this story but the first chapter is really confusing, like why is she on Saruman's tower?

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