for Technical Difficulties3/12/2014 c3 
4DKLC
Oh Garrus, bless him. He just needs to go give up and home, really.
Victory kissing the mask where Tali's mouth should be was cute. Tali's insight into Victory's unhappy past was nice.
4DKLCOh Garrus, bless him. He just needs to go give up and home, really.
Victory kissing the mask where Tali's mouth should be was cute. Tali's insight into Victory's unhappy past was nice.
3/12/2014 c2 DKLC
Okay, it's taken me a sinfully long amount of time to come back to this, and I apologise. Between my own fic and other fics that are whispering in my brain and begging me to write them, plus a thesis that I really should get around to writing (wtf is wrong with me?!) I have been totally out of time. But here, I'm back!
First of all, Victory is a fucking cool name. Just sayin'. Secondly, wow, what a bitch. I love her! Hilarious interaction with Liara, yikes!
Okay, it's taken me a sinfully long amount of time to come back to this, and I apologise. Between my own fic and other fics that are whispering in my brain and begging me to write them, plus a thesis that I really should get around to writing (wtf is wrong with me?!) I have been totally out of time. But here, I'm back!
First of all, Victory is a fucking cool name. Just sayin'. Secondly, wow, what a bitch. I love her! Hilarious interaction with Liara, yikes!
2/23/2014 c12 Joe Schmoe
"jettison them out the airlock", sounds a bit like javik
"jettison them out the airlock", sounds a bit like javik
2/19/2014 c1 DKLC
Good start. I've read very little Tali stuff on here, and even less Tali/FemShep stuff, but this looks interesting.
I do love me a renegade Shep, so this has got me intrigued.
It will probably take me a while to get through this seeing as you're already 60,000 words in, but I'll let you know what I think.
Good start. I've read very little Tali stuff on here, and even less Tali/FemShep stuff, but this looks interesting.
I do love me a renegade Shep, so this has got me intrigued.
It will probably take me a while to get through this seeing as you're already 60,000 words in, but I'll let you know what I think.
2/18/2014 c1 Sphinxes
Looked like a interesting story - however that's not a background at the start of chapter one, that tells me way too much about what your writing than I want to know. Just write - if its good your readers will be hooked. I'm going to have to try reading this later when all the details from the outline have faded.
Looked like a interesting story - however that's not a background at the start of chapter one, that tells me way too much about what your writing than I want to know. Just write - if its good your readers will be hooked. I'm going to have to try reading this later when all the details from the outline have faded.
1/15/2014 c7 1SpecH82T
Noooooooooooooooohohohohoho you evil you, how could you let Kaidan survive and kill of Ash... This can not be, its blasphemy of the highest order!
other than that, good story! :)
1SpecH82TNoooooooooooooooohohohohoho you evil you, how could you let Kaidan survive and kill of Ash... This can not be, its blasphemy of the highest order!
other than that, good story! :)
11/20/2013 c11 anotamous
This chapter, while liked, didn't seem to flow as well as the others. The sentences were kind of choppy, and the dialogue appeared a little bit forced at times. Apart from that I like this work, hope to see more.
This chapter, while liked, didn't seem to flow as well as the others. The sentences were kind of choppy, and the dialogue appeared a little bit forced at times. Apart from that I like this work, hope to see more.
11/21/2013 c11 1Reko-Luna
I love how you made miranda feel more human.
It people like you that make Miranda more likable and i commend you on that. A cookie for you good sir
1Reko-LunaI love how you made miranda feel more human.
It people like you that make Miranda more likable and i commend you on that. A cookie for you good sir
11/4/2013 c1 Bloodykyoto
This is cool and I can't wait to read more. Will Shepard be a little more friendly to those she works with over time thanks to Tali? I know she will still be rude and everything but I kinda would like to see her change a little over time with those she interacts with the most besides Tali. Just a little less rude. example she'll still get angry at them for doing or saying something that annoys her but not to the point of killing them. At least before the Normandy gets attacked. Then shes back to her old I don't care attitude except around Tali. These are just my thoughts and I don't want you to think that I don't like your story. I love it and its hard to find good Tali/FemShep romance stories.
This is cool and I can't wait to read more. Will Shepard be a little more friendly to those she works with over time thanks to Tali? I know she will still be rude and everything but I kinda would like to see her change a little over time with those she interacts with the most besides Tali. Just a little less rude. example she'll still get angry at them for doing or saying something that annoys her but not to the point of killing them. At least before the Normandy gets attacked. Then shes back to her old I don't care attitude except around Tali. These are just my thoughts and I don't want you to think that I don't like your story. I love it and its hard to find good Tali/FemShep romance stories.