
10/26/2014 c3 jj
cute
cute
8/24/2014 c3 Scorpio Monkey
It's good to know I'm not the only one who thinks these two as a cute couple. How you executed the asexual bit being for reproductive purposes and sexual pleasure being another option was excellent. Been waiting a long time for a good fic of these two. Thanks for accomplishing this! I look forward to reading more of your work! :D
It's good to know I'm not the only one who thinks these two as a cute couple. How you executed the asexual bit being for reproductive purposes and sexual pleasure being another option was excellent. Been waiting a long time for a good fic of these two. Thanks for accomplishing this! I look forward to reading more of your work! :D
12/9/2013 c3
25siberat
I like the concept of the piece- how Piccolo had to make that choice to save dende. I feel the writing moved at a good pace- not too long and such. He had a bit of a struggle to make that choice- which prolly wouldnt have been easy!
However, it does get a little hard to read - like to tell who is talking stuff when in one paragraph you have both char's speaking. I'd try to do a paragrapg for one speaking, then move to another when the next is speaking. I had to focus on who was speaking and would distract from the story.
I don't know how, erm- graphic- you wanted to make the story- but you built up to is nicely- did have a story to go with it.
I think you should continue on indeed. The story was cute indeed!

I like the concept of the piece- how Piccolo had to make that choice to save dende. I feel the writing moved at a good pace- not too long and such. He had a bit of a struggle to make that choice- which prolly wouldnt have been easy!
However, it does get a little hard to read - like to tell who is talking stuff when in one paragraph you have both char's speaking. I'd try to do a paragrapg for one speaking, then move to another when the next is speaking. I had to focus on who was speaking and would distract from the story.
I don't know how, erm- graphic- you wanted to make the story- but you built up to is nicely- did have a story to go with it.
I think you should continue on indeed. The story was cute indeed!
12/6/2013 c3
9Warlady
Oh, my god! I loved it to the last letter!
Please a sequel is a must, of course.

Oh, my god! I loved it to the last letter!
Please a sequel is a must, of course.
12/2/2013 c2
3lilpreciousone
If you don't update soon like you said you would if you got reviews I'll be seriously p.o'd with you! I can be nasty. Lol...update and no harm will befall you.

If you don't update soon like you said you would if you got reviews I'll be seriously p.o'd with you! I can be nasty. Lol...update and no harm will befall you.
11/30/2013 c2
1rampantidiocy18
CLIFFHANGER! gah! What are you trying to do to me?! Very good, i enjoyed the description of piccolo :D

CLIFFHANGER! gah! What are you trying to do to me?! Very good, i enjoyed the description of piccolo :D
11/17/2013 c1
1rampantidiocy18
i am completely excited to find out what happens next! i love the pairing of piccolo and dende, the possibility for a sweet and powerful relationship is endless. i think you portray the depth of feeling that piccolo has for the little namek well. please, please, please keep writing :)

i am completely excited to find out what happens next! i love the pairing of piccolo and dende, the possibility for a sweet and powerful relationship is endless. i think you portray the depth of feeling that piccolo has for the little namek well. please, please, please keep writing :)