for my kingom heart & digimon adventure 029/11/2016 c1 
7Junior BLD
Good start, but a little short. Is this going to update soon? I am interested to learn what happens next.
7Junior BLDGood start, but a little short. Is this going to update soon? I am interested to learn what happens next.
5/14/2015 c1 Go fuk urselv
da hell that story so shorts -_-
da hell that story so shorts -_-
4/26/2015 c1 27Cherry-Chann
I personally like this! It's a cute story so far and I think it deserves to be continued. Don't listen to those idiotic reviews who go on about how lame this is or how it needs work.
It's how he writes. If you don't like it, back the fuck off and leave him be. Let the kid write what he wants and flock back to your own little stories.
27Cherry-ChannI personally like this! It's a cute story so far and I think it deserves to be continued. Don't listen to those idiotic reviews who go on about how lame this is or how it needs work.
It's how he writes. If you don't like it, back the fuck off and leave him be. Let the kid write what he wants and flock back to your own little stories.
11/2/2014 c1 35Zero Slash One
I... no, just no. There is no excuse for how shoddily written this is. As a rule of thumb, blatant self-inserts aren't regarded highly, especially not when the fundamental rules of writing are disregarded.
1: Capitalize ONLY the first word of a sentence. Always remember this.
2: Always make certain that the words are correctly spelled.
3: Names are capitalized by default.
35Zero Slash OneI... no, just no. There is no excuse for how shoddily written this is. As a rule of thumb, blatant self-inserts aren't regarded highly, especially not when the fundamental rules of writing are disregarded.
1: Capitalize ONLY the first word of a sentence. Always remember this.
2: Always make certain that the words are correctly spelled.
3: Names are capitalized by default.
9/9/2014 c1 23Samantha Peace HeartStar
Sounds like it's going to get really interesting. Hope you continue it.
- Sammy
23Samantha Peace HeartStarSounds like it's going to get really interesting. Hope you continue it.
- Sammy
12/21/2013 c1 King Spritzee
Character use and things they would say: 0/10
Awesomeness: 0/10
Correct spelling: 2/10
Likeness: 1/10
Summary was great: No. Worth 0/5
Does it have a summary over 100 words: No. worth 0/5
Does it have a summary: Yes worth 1 point.
OCs' names 4/10
Chapter length: 2/10
Using other characters from others stories or shows with permission or AU: No: worth 0/5
No spam: yes. Worth 4 points.
Words exceeding number of chapters: Yes. Worth 20 points.
So here is your score out of 100.
34/100. Try harder.
Character use and things they would say: 0/10
Awesomeness: 0/10
Correct spelling: 2/10
Likeness: 1/10
Summary was great: No. Worth 0/5
Does it have a summary over 100 words: No. worth 0/5
Does it have a summary: Yes worth 1 point.
OCs' names 4/10
Chapter length: 2/10
Using other characters from others stories or shows with permission or AU: No: worth 0/5
No spam: yes. Worth 4 points.
Words exceeding number of chapters: Yes. Worth 20 points.
So here is your score out of 100.
34/100. Try harder.