for Project Freelancer: Uncertainty12/11/2013 c16 
11FemaleWhovian
Awww, cute! Well, you know what I mean. So, is it Omicron that's causing Penn's anger issues?
11FemaleWhovianAwww, cute! Well, you know what I mean. So, is it Omicron that's causing Penn's anger issues?
12/7/2013 c12 maddog
this story is fucking good please write more also is seth going to get props for being the closest to come to actually beating tex , also even though as mentioned it was not as powerful as the genuine article, even knock off mjolnir armor is not supposed to be that fragile ( unless it is actually a different kind for the sake of this story )
this story is fucking good please write more also is seth going to get props for being the closest to come to actually beating tex , also even though as mentioned it was not as powerful as the genuine article, even knock off mjolnir armor is not supposed to be that fragile ( unless it is actually a different kind for the sake of this story )
12/7/2013 c5 Alpha-33
Pennsylvania is a state
Pennsylvania is a state
12/5/2013 c10 11FemaleWhovian
I've had stomach flu all week, so I feel Penns pain! Excellent as usual!
11FemaleWhovianI've had stomach flu all week, so I feel Penns pain! Excellent as usual!
11/30/2013 c1 Anonymouse
Hey Phantom117. I can see you do better in your later chapters but you might want to rewrite and edit your first chapter too because if readers don't like your first chapter they won't try out your second chapter. Going through it a second time means you can make it longer, more detailed and paint Seth with more personality now that you know a bit further into the future.
Another thing you can do is change your title because there is no title more boring or over used than 'The New Guy'. Go to the FFnet search engine, Misc - Red vs Blue and search the word New... I see at least fifteen other titles like yours... You need to stand out! Think about your main plot and maybe a song title that fits it and Seth... 'Project Freelancer: Unbalanced' will stand out much more than 'The New Guy.'
The last thing I would recommend is read. Read and review lots of your fellow RvB Ficcers and that's the best way you can improve as well as meet new friends who might review you too. Good luck.
Hey Phantom117. I can see you do better in your later chapters but you might want to rewrite and edit your first chapter too because if readers don't like your first chapter they won't try out your second chapter. Going through it a second time means you can make it longer, more detailed and paint Seth with more personality now that you know a bit further into the future.
Another thing you can do is change your title because there is no title more boring or over used than 'The New Guy'. Go to the FFnet search engine, Misc - Red vs Blue and search the word New... I see at least fifteen other titles like yours... You need to stand out! Think about your main plot and maybe a song title that fits it and Seth... 'Project Freelancer: Unbalanced' will stand out much more than 'The New Guy.'
The last thing I would recommend is read. Read and review lots of your fellow RvB Ficcers and that's the best way you can improve as well as meet new friends who might review you too. Good luck.
11/30/2013 c7 Kamen Rider Shinigami
This is getting good. I wonder which part of the Alpha is Omicron.
This is getting good. I wonder which part of the Alpha is Omicron.
11/29/2013 c6 Kamen Rider Shinigami
I love how Seth says no or will be angry at the freelancers but when South speaks he calms down and agrees. Will they be a couple?
I love how Seth says no or will be angry at the freelancers but when South speaks he calms down and agrees. Will they be a couple?
11/22/2013 c2 145WargishBoromirFan
Block paragraphs make this very hard to read. Try to make sure each speaker gets a new line. Good luck!
145WargishBoromirFanBlock paragraphs make this very hard to read. Try to make sure each speaker gets a new line. Good luck!