for DPMJ: The Sekirei Initiative1/16/2020 c43 
3The Iron of Antioch
Hey Bro. I know you got life and other stuff. But I’d love to see this continue. If you need any help with it or anything else, Slide into my DM’s and we can work something out.
3The Iron of AntiochHey Bro. I know you got life and other stuff. But I’d love to see this continue. If you need any help with it or anything else, Slide into my DM’s and we can work something out.
1/11/2020 c1 The Iron of Antioch
For your 2020 review: BRUH THIS SHIT’S FUCKIN’ GOLD! Lmao. Keep them creationatin’ juices flowin’!
But fr fr! Happy Mothafuckin New Year bruddah! Here’s to a good one!
For your 2020 review: BRUH THIS SHIT’S FUCKIN’ GOLD! Lmao. Keep them creationatin’ juices flowin’!
But fr fr! Happy Mothafuckin New Year bruddah! Here’s to a good one!
3/3/2017 c22 4Azrael's Son
so far as i can see good writing. but please confirm the number of sekirei dante and the others have ... he had one... ok then he had six. then four. now five... please clarify if you should do a re write... not saying your a good author on this but when finished writing a story proof read the entire thing looking for grammar mistakes and plot layout flops as is case with number of sekirei dante has here. just a tip from one writer to another. pleasure reading this great piece aside from the mistakes it is very well written and i will recommend to my friends for reading.
4Azrael's Sonso far as i can see good writing. but please confirm the number of sekirei dante and the others have ... he had one... ok then he had six. then four. now five... please clarify if you should do a re write... not saying your a good author on this but when finished writing a story proof read the entire thing looking for grammar mistakes and plot layout flops as is case with number of sekirei dante has here. just a tip from one writer to another. pleasure reading this great piece aside from the mistakes it is very well written and i will recommend to my friends for reading.
3/3/2017 c8 Azrael's Son
very good so far! i look forward to more chapters later please proofread for errors in spelling in future thank you for reading
very good so far! i look forward to more chapters later please proofread for errors in spelling in future thank you for reading
1/27/2017 c1 Guest
Didnt he at the begining realize that he was in sekirei world ? How is that he didnt know musubi or the twins and what they were doing?
Didnt he at the begining realize that he was in sekirei world ? How is that he didnt know musubi or the twins and what they were doing?
7/25/2015 c3 1Ace of Spies
I dunno man I liked this chapter but the fact thaT Dante knows like everything about the Sekirei Plan (which makes sense I guess) pretty much guarantees that if the game played out normally he'd win.
1Ace of SpiesI dunno man I liked this chapter but the fact thaT Dante knows like everything about the Sekirei Plan (which makes sense I guess) pretty much guarantees that if the game played out normally he'd win.
7/25/2015 c2 Ace of Spies
Heh... not sure what the Ultimatrix does yet and I totally got that reference to Captain America: The First Avenger lol
I enjoyed this chapter.
Heh... not sure what the Ultimatrix does yet and I totally got that reference to Captain America: The First Avenger lol
I enjoyed this chapter.
7/21/2015 c1 Ace of Spies
This definitely worries me a little bit. It's too soon to tell, but this OC of yours is starting to look like a Mary Sue.
So far he has absolutely no flaws as he shows how superior he is to the Sekirei while mocking them. Do you see why that can be a problem?
Also... why, just why does he have an Ultimatrix? I don't get it... but it seems to do different things so I do look forward to seeing that.
Anyway the grammar is really good from and from what I can tell the sentence structure is flawless... but I'm no expert.
This definitely worries me a little bit. It's too soon to tell, but this OC of yours is starting to look like a Mary Sue.
So far he has absolutely no flaws as he shows how superior he is to the Sekirei while mocking them. Do you see why that can be a problem?
Also... why, just why does he have an Ultimatrix? I don't get it... but it seems to do different things so I do look forward to seeing that.
Anyway the grammar is really good from and from what I can tell the sentence structure is flawless... but I'm no expert.
6/1/2015 c1 Guest
when you gonna post the winter sekerei?
when you gonna post the winter sekerei?
6/20/2014 c1 2Red Death
Really really need a proofreader. Lots of word use errors and typoes.
Liking the idea of the story, but each of these errors makes the reader stop and try to figure out what your talking about before they move on.
2Red DeathReally really need a proofreader. Lots of word use errors and typoes.
Liking the idea of the story, but each of these errors makes the reader stop and try to figure out what your talking about before they move on.
4/19/2014 c6 Something Deep and Meaningful
Interesting enough, kind of what I like to call a junk-food fic, not the best plot/characters/grammar, but it's fun regardless, the general vibe of the story fits that I think. One thing that I just can't wrap my mind around is how Homura was spelled wrong every single time in the exact same way, surely typing fast would add some diversity to the mistakes, but it is literally the exact same spelling of Hourma every time.
Interesting enough, kind of what I like to call a junk-food fic, not the best plot/characters/grammar, but it's fun regardless, the general vibe of the story fits that I think. One thing that I just can't wrap my mind around is how Homura was spelled wrong every single time in the exact same way, surely typing fast would add some diversity to the mistakes, but it is literally the exact same spelling of Hourma every time.