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83LucyLuna
I liked this. It's nicely done teen-angst piece. It's sort of sad how Lily has had this long-held crush on Teddy that can't ever come to anything because he's so much older and has Victoire. I like the way you write her handling it, writing letters to Teddy that she burns instead of sending and the like. The end here that's sort of hopeful, where she's moving on, making friends and doing fun things with them was a nice way to end this.
83LucyLunaI liked this. It's nicely done teen-angst piece. It's sort of sad how Lily has had this long-held crush on Teddy that can't ever come to anything because he's so much older and has Victoire. I like the way you write her handling it, writing letters to Teddy that she burns instead of sending and the like. The end here that's sort of hopeful, where she's moving on, making friends and doing fun things with them was a nice way to end this.
12/7/2013 c1 161Lillielle
Second person point-of-view was perfect for this. I love that even from the start, she's had a crush on Teddy but didn't recognise it when she was younger. And the fact that she was put in Slytherin (my head canon forever puts Lily Luna in Slytherin :p ). I also love the line about diminishing her emotions by trying to write them out. It's a sad truth. And then the conversation with Teddy...augh, boys. The ending is lovely. :)
161LillielleSecond person point-of-view was perfect for this. I love that even from the start, she's had a crush on Teddy but didn't recognise it when she was younger. And the fact that she was put in Slytherin (my head canon forever puts Lily Luna in Slytherin :p ). I also love the line about diminishing her emotions by trying to write them out. It's a sad truth. And then the conversation with Teddy...augh, boys. The ending is lovely. :)
12/7/2013 c1 deletes
This was awesome! I'm not big on any of the characters, but your descriptions were just dazzling. One of my favourite parts is where you describe Lily writing letters.
This was awesome! I'm not big on any of the characters, but your descriptions were just dazzling. One of my favourite parts is where you describe Lily writing letters.
12/6/2013 c1 66Runaway Renegades
I actually really enjoyed this. I see Lily as a Slytherin myself and having a crush on Teddy from the beginning, so it was easy to pick up on your characterization of her. I also liked how you wrote this in second person as it was easier to step right into Lily's shoes and know exactly how she was feeling.
66Runaway RenegadesI actually really enjoyed this. I see Lily as a Slytherin myself and having a crush on Teddy from the beginning, so it was easy to pick up on your characterization of her. I also liked how you wrote this in second person as it was easier to step right into Lily's shoes and know exactly how she was feeling.
12/6/2013 c1 95Eternally Seventeen
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH! THIS WAS SO GOOD!
I frankly do not know how to express my love and admiration for this gorgeouuuss story. The language is so freaking rich and your metaphors, gosh, how did you even come up with lines like that?! Comparing snow to falling stars, the way you describe her angst, the Sorting, AND THAT LOVELYYYY BIT in the end - your writing is simply fantastic, and I think this is one of the BEST pieces I have read from you! Amazing :D
95Eternally SeventeenAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH! THIS WAS SO GOOD!
I frankly do not know how to express my love and admiration for this gorgeouuuss story. The language is so freaking rich and your metaphors, gosh, how did you even come up with lines like that?! Comparing snow to falling stars, the way you describe her angst, the Sorting, AND THAT LOVELYYYY BIT in the end - your writing is simply fantastic, and I think this is one of the BEST pieces I have read from you! Amazing :D