for The Trials of Friendship7/13/2014 c16 remedyfordryeyes
oh wow! cool! can you review my story? Im a new writer and it would mean a lot to me :)
oh wow! cool! can you review my story? Im a new writer and it would mean a lot to me :)
4/26/2014 c11 Guest
Cool story I really like it.
Cool story I really like it.
3/15/2014 c2 
5The Pokemon Traveller
A Foe or a Misguided Friend is a unique story. A cross over of digimon and fairy tail as a reader this idea caught me straight away. I was full of questions about how these two would mix and yet I have to say I was surprised to be greeted by a huge amount of text in the intro which explained really everything about the character.
As a reader I was a little disappointed that I almost knew everything about Dagon Blaze without even starting the story yet. What I personally wanted as a reader was the first chapter to really set the scene for me through Dagon's eyes. Not be told everything about him because I discover that in the story.
Yet don't let this intro put you off, the first person view in this story is very good. The way Dagon speaks and sees the world is interesting. But I wouldn't spoil it here in this review. Adding to this, Dagon's story is one even as I type this review now all I think about is where will it go from here? My adventure through eleven chapters wasn't enough for me and I look forward to more.
Still as much as I can praise this story, there are some things that I as a reader find annoying. But ofcourse others may disagree with me on the subjects so take this review section with a pinch of salt. My first issue is the whole author talking to character thing going on. I just don't think it needs to be there. In fact I would say the very last line in each of the eleven chapters could finish the chapter quite nicely without the talking between author and character after.
Another little grip I have this the text such as (Flash back). Again this doesn't need to be there. The character can do this very clear by explaining the flash back to the reader in there own words. My final bad point about this story is sometimes we get character speaking a little too much. Sometime it easy to have the character explain it without going off into a huge speech. An example maybe... Erza explained to me that the fairy tail guild is filled with hope and friendship before she was dragged away by the guards and I couldn't agree more with her.
But in my final conclusion I'd say this story is worth following, the grammar and spelling is good and there are some mistakes. But we all make them here on after all we're only human. But if you really want to enjoy this story to the fullest. I suggest you try to avoid reading the intro until you really have too as it gives you time as a reader to build a picture of Dagon and the situation he finds himself in without you knowing everything ahead to time to spoil it.
5The Pokemon TravellerA Foe or a Misguided Friend is a unique story. A cross over of digimon and fairy tail as a reader this idea caught me straight away. I was full of questions about how these two would mix and yet I have to say I was surprised to be greeted by a huge amount of text in the intro which explained really everything about the character.
As a reader I was a little disappointed that I almost knew everything about Dagon Blaze without even starting the story yet. What I personally wanted as a reader was the first chapter to really set the scene for me through Dagon's eyes. Not be told everything about him because I discover that in the story.
Yet don't let this intro put you off, the first person view in this story is very good. The way Dagon speaks and sees the world is interesting. But I wouldn't spoil it here in this review. Adding to this, Dagon's story is one even as I type this review now all I think about is where will it go from here? My adventure through eleven chapters wasn't enough for me and I look forward to more.
Still as much as I can praise this story, there are some things that I as a reader find annoying. But ofcourse others may disagree with me on the subjects so take this review section with a pinch of salt. My first issue is the whole author talking to character thing going on. I just don't think it needs to be there. In fact I would say the very last line in each of the eleven chapters could finish the chapter quite nicely without the talking between author and character after.
Another little grip I have this the text such as (Flash back). Again this doesn't need to be there. The character can do this very clear by explaining the flash back to the reader in there own words. My final bad point about this story is sometimes we get character speaking a little too much. Sometime it easy to have the character explain it without going off into a huge speech. An example maybe... Erza explained to me that the fairy tail guild is filled with hope and friendship before she was dragged away by the guards and I couldn't agree more with her.
But in my final conclusion I'd say this story is worth following, the grammar and spelling is good and there are some mistakes. But we all make them here on after all we're only human. But if you really want to enjoy this story to the fullest. I suggest you try to avoid reading the intro until you really have too as it gives you time as a reader to build a picture of Dagon and the situation he finds himself in without you knowing everything ahead to time to spoil it.