for An Unexpected Journey1/10 c2 Naedine-Daki
I just wanted to take a moment to let you know how much I admire your incredible writing talent. Your story left such a strong impression on me, and I’d love the chance to chat with you about it.
I’m a commission-based digital artist with experience creating comics in collaboration with authors across various platforms. I genuinely believe your story would make an amazing comic, and I’d love to explore that possibility with you. I often find it challenging to reach out to authors and express my thoughts effectively, which is why I came across your profile and took the time to read your story.
Feel free to connect with me on Discord: lishafang
Or on Twitter: Pelu_Oficial123
I just wanted to take a moment to let you know how much I admire your incredible writing talent. Your story left such a strong impression on me, and I’d love the chance to chat with you about it.
I’m a commission-based digital artist with experience creating comics in collaboration with authors across various platforms. I genuinely believe your story would make an amazing comic, and I’d love to explore that possibility with you. I often find it challenging to reach out to authors and express my thoughts effectively, which is why I came across your profile and took the time to read your story.
Feel free to connect with me on Discord: lishafang
Or on Twitter: Pelu_Oficial123
3/24/2014 c1 
5My-Mental-Mind
This one-shot was generally good. I liked Elena as a character, and I think that she was well portrayed. I liked the fact that John got her a silver charm bracelet in the end too. A nice little piece, and although it has a few mistakes that I've given you the corrections for, that fact that you are not a native speaker of this language is very good. I am impressed. Well Done!
E.E.
"red converses"
Correction: "red converse"
"peaking in all directions"
Correction: "Spiking up in all directions"
"flickering shine of a fire visible"
Correction: "flickering light of visible flames in the window" (I tried to keep it similar)
"I took of my jeans"
Correction: "I took off my jeans"
5My-Mental-MindThis one-shot was generally good. I liked Elena as a character, and I think that she was well portrayed. I liked the fact that John got her a silver charm bracelet in the end too. A nice little piece, and although it has a few mistakes that I've given you the corrections for, that fact that you are not a native speaker of this language is very good. I am impressed. Well Done!
E.E.
"red converses"
Correction: "red converse"
"peaking in all directions"
Correction: "Spiking up in all directions"
"flickering shine of a fire visible"
Correction: "flickering light of visible flames in the window" (I tried to keep it similar)
"I took of my jeans"
Correction: "I took off my jeans"