12/13/2019 c1 Exia
It was good story keep it up
It was good story keep it up
3/25/2019 c1 catspats31
While the writing quality of your story is good in terms of spelling and grammar, please note this part of the Content Guidelines:
"Please note FanFiction does not accept explicit content, Fiction Rating: MA, and the rating is only presented for reference."
You should remove all of the detailed descriptions of physical interaction of sexual or violent nature in this story if you want it to remain at this site, or upload it to a site where "Fiction MA" content is allowed like AdultFanfiction or WattPad.
While the writing quality of your story is good in terms of spelling and grammar, please note this part of the Content Guidelines:
"Please note FanFiction does not accept explicit content, Fiction Rating: MA, and the rating is only presented for reference."
You should remove all of the detailed descriptions of physical interaction of sexual or violent nature in this story if you want it to remain at this site, or upload it to a site where "Fiction MA" content is allowed like AdultFanfiction or WattPad.
11/11/2017 c1 32experimenter19
I can picture it now the overprotective smothering brother become the overprotective smothering uncle after scaring Allen half to death after hearing his sister is pregnant
I can picture it now the overprotective smothering brother become the overprotective smothering uncle after scaring Allen half to death after hearing his sister is pregnant
2/24/2015 c1 Faith
Make a chapter about them finding out she's pregnant and trying to hide it from kumoi and everyone, I feel like these stories lack a lot of humor because they leave out the minor parts such as her brother trying to kill allen lol
Make a chapter about them finding out she's pregnant and trying to hide it from kumoi and everyone, I feel like these stories lack a lot of humor because they leave out the minor parts such as her brother trying to kill allen lol
2/23/2015 c1 Faith
More! Like kumois reaction! And their wedding and their baby!
More! Like kumois reaction! And their wedding and their baby!
1/3/2014 c1 Tron8
It was a good story, i would like to read a sequel, but that's your decision.
Keep it up the good work!
It was a good story, i would like to read a sequel, but that's your decision.
Keep it up the good work!
1/1/2014 c1 Erzatscarlett
Good story. I hope there's going to be a sequel. Or it becomes a full multi - chapter story.
Good story. I hope there's going to be a sequel. Or it becomes a full multi - chapter story.
12/24/2013 c1 guest
I think the story was good (maybe you could had put some more foreplay but that's just my pervert side talking), a sequel would be awesome.
I think the story was good (maybe you could had put some more foreplay but that's just my pervert side talking), a sequel would be awesome.
12/24/2013 c1 1TykkiMikk
Finally a good written (could use some adjustments (but hey I'm not complaining)) well descriptive, length story that I very much enjoyed reading I do hope to be able to read a sequel (preferably a story if at all possible)
Finally a good written (could use some adjustments (but hey I'm not complaining)) well descriptive, length story that I very much enjoyed reading I do hope to be able to read a sequel (preferably a story if at all possible)
12/23/2013 c1 blueleader73
i think this will be a good story, but i haven't had a chance to read it yet but i will soon. I love -man. :) Please keep writing more stories.
i think this will be a good story, but i haven't had a chance to read it yet but i will soon. I love -man. :) Please keep writing more stories.