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12/25/2013 c1 7windfox90
Good start to the story
12/25/2013 c1 eavise
Good first chapter
12/25/2013 c1 Strife666
interesting...
12/25/2013 c1 5Fahad09
Sorry to say this, but I'm disappointed with this story.
Not only has the story been done a dozen times over in the last month alone, but it doesn't make any sense. Raynare is so incredibly weak that a skilled human can kill her.
To a trained, highly skilled ninja she should be nothing, with or without using any chakra. Plus Issei is not a likable character and that Naruto had to die for him is annoying as hell.
The fact that Naruto is getting bashed so badly in school not only makes nor sense but makes Naruto come off as as a wuss because he does nothing but take it (something I could never stand in the Cannon how he let the villagers action go as nothing, I mean they never even apologized to how they acted).

Overall, not your best work
Let me just say I'm a fan of your work and I love your stories but this by far bellow your usual standards. My recommendation is to rewrite this chapter or scrap this story.

Sorry if I'm coming off a bit harsh, I don't mean to flame or anything but I just have really high expectations from your stories, and I know your capable of much better.
12/25/2013 c1 19Stormking27
What the pairing?
12/25/2013 c1 1ddcj1990
Very good first chapter I like it so looking forward to reading more
12/25/2013 c1 13Heliosion
A nice set up in progress. Looking forward to the next chapter
12/25/2013 c1 zero
love it so far Hope to see more and yes to lemon
12/25/2013 c1 Guest
cool first a suggestion instead of him joining right away have him go off on his own a bit dont think ive seen one where he accually doesnt join them
12/25/2013 c1 god of all
Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.
12/25/2013 c1 Only Exception 23
Nice prologue keep it up and good job ..
12/25/2013 c1 TyrionTheImp
You couldn't have made Naruto an angel or something? That would've been a great story. The Naruto being a devil thing is getting quite old now.
12/25/2013 c1 Kinunatzs The Eternal
boring and it's the usual Naruto protect Issei and dies with him and turn into a devil route repetitive and dull so as the pairing is their nothing new here? like Naruto is an ArcAngel or the original Lucifer or something? anyway i'm not interested in this fic Ja ne!
12/25/2013 c1 SPark681
Well this seems like its gonna be an interesting story wonder what caused Naruto to be so empty inside that he no longer cares about anything anymore. Anyways keep up the great work!
12/25/2013 c1 Tiara
Cool story update soon
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