for Adventure of a Lifetime3/16/2014 c7 duaimei
This story is very promising.
You spelled Chicken Alfredo right, however there are a lot of spelling errors which makes it hard to read. There are bound to be misspellings, but too many can interfere with comprehension and original intent of the author. It would be good if you would run these chapters through a spell checker and updated it the next time you go to add a chapter.
discution discussion
disicion decision
coherriont coherent
simiular/simulare similar
shpell spiel or speech, I'm not sure which.
apoligetice apologetic
appresiate appreciate
etc...
This story is very promising.
You spelled Chicken Alfredo right, however there are a lot of spelling errors which makes it hard to read. There are bound to be misspellings, but too many can interfere with comprehension and original intent of the author. It would be good if you would run these chapters through a spell checker and updated it the next time you go to add a chapter.
discution discussion
disicion decision
coherriont coherent
simiular/simulare similar
shpell spiel or speech, I'm not sure which.
apoligetice apologetic
appresiate appreciate
etc...
1/18/2014 c6 
18Cyn Finnegan
Oh, thank goodness... I was afraid you were going to have Relena being Heero's "intended" and give her Dorothy's personality. I wouldn't mind seeing Relena show up, possibly as an ally, but that's up to you.
18Cyn FinneganOh, thank goodness... I was afraid you were going to have Relena being Heero's "intended" and give her Dorothy's personality. I wouldn't mind seeing Relena show up, possibly as an ally, but that's up to you.