for Arctic's Pokemon journey2/3/2019 c3 EverydayAce
I like where this could go. But i mean you jump into things a bit to fast. And it would be a really good story if the chapters were longer with more storyline. I definitely see a lot of potential
I like where this could go. But i mean you jump into things a bit to fast. And it would be a really good story if the chapters were longer with more storyline. I definitely see a lot of potential
10/16/2018 c1 Urmomgay
Bad
Bad
7/17/2018 c4 
6Spideyfangirl123
my character is very short tempered, always has a plan that may or may not work, is half umbroen but tells no one. she has moon has a pokemon named tigy. it is a friendship type(made that up) tigy is very strong when the r positive feelings looks like tigger from winne the pooh just cuter and more cat like. he is very inocent. knows almost every move but is rather careless like his can speak English which scares a lot of people. midnight has a litten, an umbreon, and other pokemonmy character is very short tempered, always has a plan that may or may not work, is half umbroen but tells no one. she has moon has a pokemon named tigy. it is a friendship type(made that up) tigy is very strong when the r positive feelings looks like tigger from winne the pooh just cuter and more cat like. he is very inocent. knows almost every move but is rather careless like his can speak English which scares a lot of people. midnight has a litten, an umbreon, and other pokemon
6Spideyfangirl123my character is very short tempered, always has a plan that may or may not work, is half umbroen but tells no one. she has moon has a pokemon named tigy. it is a friendship type(made that up) tigy is very strong when the r positive feelings looks like tigger from winne the pooh just cuter and more cat like. he is very inocent. knows almost every move but is rather careless like his can speak English which scares a lot of people. midnight has a litten, an umbreon, and other pokemonmy character is very short tempered, always has a plan that may or may not work, is half umbroen but tells no one. she has moon has a pokemon named tigy. it is a friendship type(made that up) tigy is very strong when the r positive feelings looks like tigger from winne the pooh just cuter and more cat like. he is very inocent. knows almost every move but is rather careless like his can speak English which scares a lot of people. midnight has a litten, an umbreon, and other pokemon
7/3/2018 c5 Spideyfangirl123
hi can my character midnight be here? she is a girl , loves eevees , umbrons , dark pokemon ,and litten.
hi can my character midnight be here? she is a girl , loves eevees , umbrons , dark pokemon ,and litten.
7/24/2016 c5 manglepie1234
but this story is awsome
but this story is awsome
7/23/2016 c1 TheCringeJudge
Honestly, this was terrible.
The cringe levels were over 9000.
What's with this:
can't even learn aerial ace.
2. YOUR NAME IN THIS MAKES NO SENSE! DID TEAM ROCKET STEAL ALL THE VOWELS?!
3. YOU KNOW WHO YOUR MOM IS
4. ASH IS 10 FOREVER, NOT YOUR BABY DADDY
5. WHO IS BAILEY? WHAT IS THIS "STORY"
Honestly, this was terrible.
The cringe levels were over 9000.
What's with this:
can't even learn aerial ace.
2. YOUR NAME IN THIS MAKES NO SENSE! DID TEAM ROCKET STEAL ALL THE VOWELS?!
3. YOU KNOW WHO YOUR MOM IS
4. ASH IS 10 FOREVER, NOT YOUR BABY DADDY
5. WHO IS BAILEY? WHAT IS THIS "STORY"
7/23/2016 c3 manglepie1234
this is really fun to read please make another chapter!
this is really fun to read please make another chapter!
1/20/2014 c1 17The Critic's Realm
Once there was a young girl. She had a perfect life. She loved her
family, her friends and her pet dog. She got good grades and was on countless sports teams.
She was loved by everyone and absolutley nothing was wrong with her.
However, one night, she was walking home. She was walking through a
graveyard.
When her parents woke up the next day, she wasn't in her bed. They
went down to the cemetary where they found her dead body. The doctors found no source of death.
If you copy and paste this to 10 other story reveiws, the one you love
will kiss you and when you grow old enough, they will marry you and have many children.
If you don't within three days, you'll both die a painful death by the
hand of that girl
17The Critic's RealmOnce there was a young girl. She had a perfect life. She loved her
family, her friends and her pet dog. She got good grades and was on countless sports teams.
She was loved by everyone and absolutley nothing was wrong with her.
However, one night, she was walking home. She was walking through a
graveyard.
When her parents woke up the next day, she wasn't in her bed. They
went down to the cemetary where they found her dead body. The doctors found no source of death.
If you copy and paste this to 10 other story reveiws, the one you love
will kiss you and when you grow old enough, they will marry you and have many children.
If you don't within three days, you'll both die a painful death by the
hand of that girl
1/5/2014 c1 160Farla
There are seven thousand stories just on this site in this category with "pokemon" in their title. "New" features in another thousand. There are over four hundred "chronicles", more if you include misspellings, even more with "begins" and "beginning", and even more "Character Name"'s whatever. There are almost eight hundred with "legend". There are fourteen hundred with "journey", twelve hundred with "story", almost three hundred with "quest", and two thousand with "adventure". The different region names appear another thousand or two times. "Saga", "region" and "champion" come in around two hundred. In sum, you should try to choose an original title that has to do with your story in particular, not something that indicates it's yet another story about a pokemon trainer.
Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is it."
Your grammar is atrocious. Get a beta reader.
160FarlaThere are seven thousand stories just on this site in this category with "pokemon" in their title. "New" features in another thousand. There are over four hundred "chronicles", more if you include misspellings, even more with "begins" and "beginning", and even more "Character Name"'s whatever. There are almost eight hundred with "legend". There are fourteen hundred with "journey", twelve hundred with "story", almost three hundred with "quest", and two thousand with "adventure". The different region names appear another thousand or two times. "Saga", "region" and "champion" come in around two hundred. In sum, you should try to choose an original title that has to do with your story in particular, not something that indicates it's yet another story about a pokemon trainer.
Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is it."
Your grammar is atrocious. Get a beta reader.