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for Cloverstar's Difficult Choice

2/14/2014 c1 writing no more
Really good! I loved the clear emotions that you gave the cats, particularly Cloverstar.
Great read!
1/7/2014 c1 6Lady Morning
Wow. That was very well done. It was so sad!
I really liked the emotion expressed. You did an excellent job of showing it in the cats around Cloverstar, as well as in the leader herself. Good work, and don't be afraid to show even more.
There were some mistakes with the terms from the books. It can be hard to get these exactly right, especially when the Erins take them from other words and modify them. Remember 'Clan' is always capitalized. WindClan, LightClan, ShadowClan... Don't forget that. Also, it's a vigil, not vigilance. These are very finicky, and it's hard to get them all right. Practice is the best strategy!
I loved your descriptions. Personally, I'm not at all a visual person, so it's very hard for me to picture what writers describe. You did excellently, and I have a very clear picture in my mind of the camp, the time, the mood, the night, and the sounds. Amazing work.
Keep writing!

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