Hello again! Here are my responses to your reviews:

Kanthia: . . . I know that you were just trying to help, but you made me feel terrible. This is my first One Piece fan fiction. Of course they're going to be out-of-character. I'm not that familiar with the characters. I haven't written a lot offan ficswith them in it. As for the "Sue" thing, I reallyhave no idea what you're talking about. Erika's entire character is based on the Phantom of the Operain a female form(whoISFrench,in case you didn't know that). As for the "no french" thing: there are plenty of characters in the anime show (American version) who have french accents. Also, please don't write a book for a 'sharder toread than the smaller, to-the-point reviews. Thanks for reviewing, though.

icefox35: Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked it.

Black Fox: I thought I might find a Phantom person or two...Awesome! I'm really glad that you liked it.

cassity: Thanks a bunch for the review. Here's another chapter for you all. . .


"I'm stuffed!" Luffy declared. They were sitting in the local restaurant. The buzz of chatter was ringing all around them from the other tables.

"I would hope so, Luffy," Zolo commented. "You just ate fourteen helpings."

"Speak for yourself, Zolo," Usopp said. "You've already had fifteen."

"What!" Luffy cried. "You can't have had more than me!" He slapped more food on his plate and started stuffing his face.

"Don't make yourself sick," Nami advised. Sanji laughed.

"With this food, it's hard not to get sick," he muttered under his breath. He looked around the restaurant for a moment before saying, "It's her!" They all looked where Sanji was pointing. Sure enough, there was Erika. She was talking with the bartender, though it looked like she wasn't ordering a drink. They continued to watch her, and they saw her glance in their direction. She said one last thing to the bartender before quickly leaving the restaurant.

"What was that about?" Nami asked. She heard the chair beside her slide along the floor and she saw Zolo leaving the restaurant to follow Erika.

"Zolo?" Luffy called after him. He left the table to follow them, leaving Sanji, Usopp, and Nami behind.

"I'm going after them," Sanji said. He got up to go and Nami did, as well.

"You coming, Usopp?" she asked.

"No way!" Usopp declared. "I'm not going out in the dark of the night to follow a creepy girl!" Nami shrugged.

"Suit yourself," she said, and she followed Sanji out the door. A waiter walked over to their table.

"Your bill, sir," he said, passing Usopp the paper. At one glance over the paper, he jumped out of the chair, shouted, "Wait up, Nami! I'm coming!" and ran out the door.

Zolo caught up with Erika on the outskirts of the town. He was gasping for air, having run the whole way, but Erika was completely fine. "Why are you following me?" she asked him.

"I want to challenge you to a swordfight," he replied. Her amber eyes narrowed slightly.

"Why?" she inquired.

"It is my goal to become the world's greatest swordsman," he answered. "I can't do that until I've beaten every swordsman who is better than me."

"And you think that I am better than you?"

"I can't take that chance," he said.

"I do not wish to fight you," she said. "At least, not right now."

"When?" Erika shrugged.

"When you're ready to fight me."

"I'm ready to fight you right now!" Erika drew her sword, but decided better of it and sheathed it again. She could sense that someone was watching them. She looked over in the direction of a tall man who was standing there, hidden by the darkness.

"Erika Massenett," he said.

"Yes?" she asked him, cursing mentally.

"The boss wishes to speak with you," the man said. She was afraid of this.

"Well, you can tell him to go find a nice cliff to jump off of."

"We thought you'd say something like that." More men appeared, and they formed a circle around Erika, blocking off any escape routes. "And we also came with enough firepower to kill you in case you did." Each one of them pulled out a gun.

Damn! Zolo thought. If they kill her, I can't fight her!

"You'd try shooting me in the dark?" Erika asked with a small laugh. "And in a circle, too. All one of you has to do is miss and one of your companions will be killed."

"We won't miss," the first one said. "You may be able to see in the dark like a wretched cat, but that doesn't mean that we can't see well enough to hit you."

"Fair enough," she replied with a small sigh. "Ready to try your luck, then?"

"Fire!" he shouted. There was the sound of a dozen gunshots and, like Erika had said, the ones that missed hit the people who had been surrounding her. There were several cries of pain, and in a second, Erika had quickly finished off all the ones who were not killed by the bullets. All of them, that is, except the leader.

"I'll let you live," she said. "I'm sure you won't make the same mistake twice." The man fled as quickly as he could. She let out a small sigh. "Zolo, you'll have to wait a while to face me," she said before collapsing. Zolo ran over to her and managed to catch her before she had hit the ground.

"Zolo!" Luffy cried. He had arrived just in time to see Erika fall and Zolo catch her. "Is she okay?"

"What happened?" Sanji asked. Nami and Usopp were close behind him.

"A man came to get her," Zolo explained, straining to see where she was hit through the darkness. "I think he works for Marquis. She refused to go with him. She was shot."

"Is she alive?" Luffy asked. Zolo nodded.

"We need to get her to a doctor," Usopp said.

"There are no doctors on this side of the island," Nami said, having asked a villager about that earlier. She figured that they may need one by the end of this. "We'll have to just take her onto the ship and do the best we can."

"What are we waiting for?" Zolo asked, beginning to carry her in the direction of the ship. "Let's go!"


I'll post another chapter after I get a few more reviews. Also, if any of you have any interesting plot ideas for this, could you email me and tell me? I have the next two chapters or so nice and planned out, but I don't know what to do after them. I'd really appreciate some ideas. Constructive criticisms are welcome, but please try to keep them short and sweet. Like my Biology teacher used to say: Keep essays (or in this case, reviews) like skirts-long enough to cover what they need to, but short enough to keep things interesting.

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