9Hi, thank you for reviewing my story, you know who you are, and thank you for encouraging me. I will accept any ideas graciously and try to see if I can incorporate them in.
I should stop blathering... oh! I also need some ideas for a dragon name... whoever picks the winning name will be mentioned! Well... maybe all of you will anyways... Well without a further ado, here is the story!
Father... the little voice said as her father left. But where is mother? The voice soon becoming more defined. MOTHER! she bellowed, sorrow resonating throughout the voice. After trying for several minutes she fell into a deep, yet troubled, slumber.
Her father still visited whenever possible, still keeping her a secret, but two or three days before they die...
Oromis could tell something was up, Glaedr was hiding something and Oromis noticed. Glaedr, Oromis said.
Yes, Oromis, what is it?
Are you hiding something?
The dragon's rider said. Oromis felt Glaedr carefully conceal something in his mind. Fidgeting slightly he replies, No, I am not... the dragon said with an almost imperceptible 'uh-oh' in his 'voice'.
Yes you are, what are you hiding Glaedr?
The rider said.
Hanging his head low in defeat, the dragon said I will show you, but no one can know! He then crouched to allow Oromis on and went to his secret cave.
Better? Worse? Please tell me what I have to correct, I want it to be the best it can be! I thrive on what you give.
Signed: Saphira455